Do it ! Diction.

1. No one can see me, no one would stop me, no one could help me. They would just call the house but it would be too late. My only regret is not saying goodbye . She’d have the coffee on. There was a time during my search for a cure when I tried everything to stop including giving up countless hours of sleep  . The smell filled the void in my heart. I loved to drink a glass of warm milk in the evening, to say goodnight to a long day after we’d spent another hour together. I’d tell her now it’s going okay except for the poison. It’s going okay except for how much I miss her and why it was important to drink milk.  Was it to warm? Did it leave a baffling taste in her mouth?! I’ve never been a very good mind reader. [From Joshua Ferris’s The Unnamed]

 

2 .No one can see me, no one would stop me, no one could help me. They would just call the Condo but it would be too late. My only regret is saying hello. She’d have the coffee on. There was a time during my search for a cure when I tried everything to stop including giving up many days of daydreaming. The smell filled the extravagant beats of my heart. I loved to drink a gallon of vodka in the morning, to say Good Morning to a short year after we’d spent another lousy minute together. I’d tell her now it’s going okay except for the poison. It’s going okay except for how much I miss her and why it’s not good to drink vodka. _Was it me? Did my love for her push her away?! I’ve never been a very good candidate for relationships. [From Joshua Ferris’s The Unnamed]

 

The tone has changed dramatically, it went from being sad and broken to being angry and depressed.  The meaning of the passage went from losing a loved one to being heart broken and ashamed to love. It was fun doing this assignment.